so i’m past the first blush of my second draft opening. it’s beginning to look stupid, so i think it may be time to show. at first, i was so excited with how i was able to take the same characters, the same “story,” and retell the opening in a different way, in a way that suited the new focus of the second draft. but now it just looks awful, campy, childish.
when do you show your subsequent drafts? with short stories it was usually pretty clear (i must say i did less “rewriting” and more “editing” in my short stories – smaller changes, word arrangements, cliche replacements). however, this novella second draft required some rather large changes and the new beginning needs to work before i can hope to carry the new stuff through the rest of the draft.
i have two more days in canada. i will fuss with it as much as i can before i return home and then hand it off to be seen.